Memo on peer review

TO: Mrs. Moody
FROM: Alexis Munroe
DATE: Tuesday 15th, 2009
SUBJECT: Memoir Peer Review
I liked the information I received on my peer review about my first draft of my memoir. On the peer review I realized that I needed to make sure the main point of my memoir was defined in the first paragraph, and not just describing what my senior schedule was about. I’m glad that I added in the details about what my schedule is about, I felt that I needed to show the audience that the rest of my classes weren’t necessarily easy but, I wasn’t taking five AP courses and overhauling my work load. My line about the “big woman on campus” was used to describe the power that I felt being a senior, but I wasn’t exactly a ‘power force’ at my high school. I’m way too shy to go and put myself out there, I like being comfortable with people I’m friends with or know casually. To make sure my setting and main point of my memoir is clear, I’m going to add details about my school to give the audience a scene of where I spent seven hours of my day, and all the changes that were occurring (to me and with construction on my high school) during my senior year of school.

With this information I’m going to add more details and information about that my topic is my senior year in general and not just about one subject. I have to make sure that I include all aspects of my senior year and information about all of my classes. I’m also going to go back and revise what I wrote in the first paragraph of my memoir. While I’m writing my first draft of my memoir, I have to make sure I add a lot of details about how I was feeling and what the main settings are during these events.